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I really like the concept and the direction that you've taken to approach the concept and contest here. The structure is great and the way you have laid it out is something akin to what we'd expect of a manual, I guess you could say.
Either way, it's pretty original and I like how even the pilot doesn't know there... sort of ironic, in a way.
This piece says a lot, I think.
It feels as if you are trying to show to us the thought processes going on, which is pretty cool.
It's well portrayed in six word story form.
Perhaps you could use italics or something. o.O